Scarlet & Gold

"Come said the wind to
the leaves one day,
Come o're the meadows
and we will play.
Put on your dresses
scarlet and gold, For summer is gone and the days grow cold."
Children's song 1800's

Our apples have been picked from the orchard and the aroma of baked apples fills our home. I'm enjoying a quiet Sunday as no one else is here except Mojo...my little Maltese and he's super quiet.

Two more words that are overused in writing. I'm sure we all know about them, but sometimes it's good to have a gentle reminder.

"You"
Writers often use this word when referring to general or reoccurring situations. "You" rarely refers to the reader and should be avoided.
Example: "Our aunt was nice. She always gave you books" This can be revised as, "Our aunt was nice. She always gave us books."

"When"
Readers realize that actions can occur at the same time, which is what the word "when" indicates. Thus, "when" is usually unnecessary.
Example: "When she opened the door, she saw mud on the floor." This should be revised as "She opened the door and saw mud on the floor"
Example: "When she woke up, she made the bed." Actually, she first wakes up and then makes the bed. This can be revised to "She woke up and made the bed."

My fingers are itching to write more in my new m.s. The working title is "A Thousand Points of Light." More on that later.

Ciao